Wednesday, January 15, 2020

Formal Introductory Letter

Subject: Self-introduction

Dear Prof Blackstone,

I am writing this self introductory letter to let you know more about me. My name is Phua Jia Dang and I'm currently a first year student pursuing a Mechanical Engineering Degree in Singapore Institute of Technology after graduating from Singapore Polytechnic with a diploma in Mechatronics and Robotics Engineering. My interest for engineering first developed after I realized I preferred working things out with my hands and experience back when I was younger. This interest was further developed during my time back in my robotics club that I was a part of back in my secondary school days, which paved the way for my engineering career.

My strength when it comes to communication would be my ability to project myself as looking and feeling confident. I am able to project myself with a certain degree of confidence when speaking to other people on topics that I have knowledge of. On the other hand, my weakness when it comes to speaking to other people would be that I will tend to be wary of the watchful eyes of the audience and I will start to become increasingly shy, which in turn will cause me to lose confidence and I will start to speak softer and stutter.

My ideal outcome after attending effective communications would be to maintain and continue to speak with confidence in front of any crowd, which I feel is a very important skill to obtain as this will help me during meeting presentations in front of my superiors. Also I would also want to learn how to speak clearly and effectively so that I will be able to project my ideas and intend properly as this can help prevent any miscommunication in my future workplace.

From,
Jia Dang

4 comments:

  1. Dear JD,

    Thank you for your letter. It's fairly informative and generally fluent. You cover the basic requirements. However, youve forgotten to add a close. There are also a couple language items to take note of:

    -- during my time back in my robotics club that I was a part of back in my secondary school days, > (phrasing; too wordy)
    when I was in the robotics club in my secondary school,

    -- Also I would also > (lack of comma and issue with two transitions)

    I look forward to reading more of your writing this term.

    Cheers,

    Brad

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    1. Dear Prof Blackstone,

      Thank you for pointing out my mistakes. I will take note to ensure that such mistakes are avoided for my future writings.

      Regards,
      JD

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  2. Dear JD,

    I enjoyed reading your introduction and got to know you better. One suggestion I would like to make is, perhaps you could use some transitional phrases to link your points together.

    I look forward to working with you in class!

    Regards,

    Mikaiel

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